I’m in the process of editing my new novel and decided to write the back cover draft. I’m looking for feedback, critique and suggestions. I’m also not committed to the main character’s names if you have suggestions or preferences. Any comments are welcomed, appreciated and encouraged. I have two slightly different versions below, let me know if one resonates more that the other with a first or second version. Thanks. Sierra
1. Raven and Lucas embark upon a personal cruise around the Bahamas for an adventure of a lifetime, but things go terribly wrong after finding an artifact on the beach in Bimini. In the process of denying its supernatural power and fixing all their misfortunes, they form stronger bonds with friends, strangers and ultimately each other. Is it all in Raves’ overactive archaeological scientific mind, or does the artifact truly have bad ju ju?
A wooden idol is discovered by Raven just three hours into their two-week journey. Her curiosity and background entices her to keep the artifact with the intention of researching its background and story. Where did this unique, seemingly non-Bahamian statue originate and how did it land in Bimini?
Breakfast in Bimini follows this couple’s journey through paradise and beyond, perhaps even to another dimension.
2. Raven and Lucas embark upon a personal cruise around the Bahamas for an adventure of a lifetime. Raves discovers a wooden idol on a secluded beach, just three hours into their two-week journey. Her curiosity and archaeological scientific mind entices her to keep the artifact with the intention of researching its background and story. Where did this unique, seemingly non-Bahamian statue originate and how did it land in Bimini?
Things go terribly wrong after finding the artifact. In the process of denying its supernatural power and fixing all their misfortunes, they form stronger bonds with friends, strangers and ultimately each other. Is it all in Raves’ overactive imagination, or does the idol truly have bad ju ju?
Breakfast in Bimini follows this couple’s journey through paradise and beyond, perhaps even to another dimension.
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I would try to be more active in the backcopy, for example:
An adventure of a lifetime.
At least that is what the cruise around the Bahamas was supposed to be. The artifact that Raven and Lucas found on the beach in Bimini changed all of that. Raven discovered the wooden idol in the sand first just three hours into their two-week journey. Then everything began to change.
Curiosity killed the cat, they say, and Raven won’t give up the artifact no matter what misfortunes occur. Denying its supernatural power could be her worst mistake or is it all in Raven’s mind? Her archaeological training doesn’t allow the paranormal to exist. What if she’s wrong? Where did this statue originate and how did it land in Bimini?
A journey through paradise may soon turn into a perilous trip through time and the unknown.
Thanks Darrick, I’ll consider revising to include some of your suggestions.
Sierra, I like the second version because I wanted the “terribly wrong” sentence to come later in the summary. In the second paragraph, I wonder if you can enhance the sentence by replacing the word “they” with a more descriptive phrase like “the inquisitive explorers” or ??? Can’t wait to read this, Sierra, next time I’m in Bimini!
Thanks Jena, I love the comment and I’ll look at “they” for another word. This is why I just throw things out there and go from there. And I always appreciate your thoughts. It’s another beautiful day in Bimini, see you here soon.
I REALLY like Darrick’s suggestion, too!
I prefer number two. The order makes more sense to me. The second paragraph seems conflicted: things go terribly wrong; but their misfortunes are fixed, they have closer bonds with friends and each other. That doesn’t seem like bad ju ju. I like Derrick’s thoughts – what changes that is confusing, critical, challenges her very being.
I like the idea. It sounds like a good read
Thanks syddent, I’m going with number two and taking into consideration the comments by Derrick. I love feedback to make it even better.